Nice tracking shots, great editing, and very effective use of score. 

Great location you found there. The was it was shot reminded me a lot of Amazing Stories.  

That's some good compositing Ash. Well done, check out my submission "RENDER". 

nice effects and a sequel to the first one....liked the first one too....good music and loved the track shots...nice work!! 

Good everything! I want to see MORE!!!!!! 

Not bad Ash. One thing you might want to keep in mind next time is the unmotivated dolly shots. Dolly shots are cool and can help tell your story, but only when they have a purpose. When you throw them in at random just because you can, it tends to dilute from the shots that are motivated. try using them sparingly next time, maybe when you really want your audience to focus on something. if you do so, I think your cinematography will be a lot more cohesive. Overall though, good work. 

Not bad Ash. One thing you might want to keep in mind next time is the unmotivated dolly shots. Dolly shots are cool and can help tell your story, but only when they have a purpose. When you throw them in at random just because you can, it tends to dilute from the shots that are motivated. try using them sparingly next time, maybe when you really want your audience to focus on something. if you do so, I think your cinematography will be a lot more cohesive. Overall though, good work. 

Not bad Ash. One thing you might want to keep in mind next time is the unmotivated dolly shots. Dolly shots are cool and can help tell your story, but only when they have a purpose. When you throw them in at random just because you can, it tends to dilute from the shots that are motivated. try using them sparingly next time, maybe when you really want your audience to focus on something. if you do so, I think your cinematography will be a lot more cohesive. Overall though, good work. 

Thanks for the feedback. Actually the tracking shots were deliberate. I wanted to show off the theater that was so graciously lent to me for free. The theater space is very large and cannot fit into frame even with a very wide angle lens. The dolly shots allowed me to show the depth of the theater by having foreground objects move in front of the background. The long shots from the upper level achieved this very well. The depth of the theater could not have come across as well with a simple static shot that would have made the frame look flat. I agree that all your shots need to be deliberate for the purpose of storytelling. I chose the dolly shots to help show the scope of the theater and to orient the audience to the story's setting.