I liked the fotograhpy, and nice script; the narration really kept me listening and interested. 

wow great job! I love this. I'm shortlisting this one, it's that good. 

Bit of a Fight Club style. 

good dimension for the given topic.Liked it. 

loved the narration! wicked concept! 

Great job guys! The narration was great and the deadpan really adds to the piece. Have you tried making a version where the ending's open for the audience to decide? Like not have that last gunshot and go from a shot of the guy about to pull the trigger (maybe a nice close-up on his eyes squinting as he pulls the trigger) and then cut right to the credits with no sound effect. Just a thought. You got my vote! 

Excellent execution of a gangster narrative...great stuff mate 

We had a lot of discussion over whether to leave it open or give it closure. It was a hard choice. 

Thanks to all for the great comments! We wish everyone the best of luck in the voting.